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Sickif I could  bad-mouth
my body, I'd shoot down the
punchline from my en-
trails and my health should get help
trying to inhale hunger.
Sounds Familiarthere's a dog at home,
and he's tied to the door.
(he can hear the motor run)

he sniffs for the sun,
but daylight can't comfort him.
(he stares at the boarded window)

he has itches to scratch,
while butterflies swell inside.
(his whines sound hoarse)

walls start to grow mold,
as its paper falls off.
(he claws to get out)

spilled milk is now spoiled,
but he laps it up.
(his nose is dry;  
starving to be happy)

heater starts to burn,
and the floor starts to melt,
making him cry again.

he's still waiting;
sounds familiar.

nobody told him
that she will leave
without a care.
now he'll die
with no one there.
Slowly StarvingShe swallows satisfaction; calories don't function.
(Heated) Water and I told her;
water won't waste gravity.

she breathed in
scraps of a
wonderful life,
until she melted
down.

(she loved to swim -
sea-burns & headaches;
the way it made
her smile, she
couldn't stop)

her clammy breaths
enraptured
humidity,
as heat felt her
up.

(she wanted to drown -
wayward & dehydrated;
this time it made
her energy
stagnate)  

and I told her;
water won't waste gravity.

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Plastic melts - what a fantastic face.
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*L0NE-W0lf Apr 6, 2013
Excellent titled and the ending alliteration is great! Clever piece.
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*Everlasting90 Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Natural beauty FTW!
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=slowslicksnails Mar 7, 2013  Student Writer
Yup. XP

(Thank you for the favorites! :hug: )
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~ColdHeartedCupid Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this, it says so much in so little ^__^
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=slowslicksnails Mar 3, 2013  Student Writer
Oh, thank you! :)
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~ColdHeartedCupid Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome ^__^
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~CantPickaName735 Feb 21, 2013  Student General Artist
Lol! This could be really interesting.
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=slowslicksnails Feb 21, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! And thanks so much for the favorites. :)
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*RiftedRealist Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
First six-word story I saw, love :D
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=slowslicksnails Feb 6, 2013  Student Writer
Aw thank you and thanks so much for the fave! :la:
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